To: Sarah
From: Matt

The Intentions of the Intentional: I really enjoyed this poem. The descriptions are vivid and it makes me feel like i could be sitting in a smokey coffee shop somewhere listening to this poem being read. And eventhough it seems some people were confused by the structure, that's one thing in particular that i really liked. It was unique to you. It made me remember the poem. I especially love the ending. When i first started reading, the poem seemed light and fun. The last few lines fliped it around for me, and it left me feeling kind of sad. Overall, i would say it was quite effective.


Mankaure and Khamerernebty: This poem felt very criptic to me. Like there were these deep hidden messages i had to seek out. I liked the fact that i had to read through it 3 or 4 times to get a good understanding of it. Again, you use some great description. I especially like the lines: "Time not time for minutes' sake, but the insecurities of our most false memories." As if you were observing the fact that we can all, at times, take memories and rework them in our minds to better suit us. Remembering things not quite how they actually were... The only thing i think that could possibly better the poem is to give a little more background into what you're talking about. help the reader get a sense of the message early on, so they don't find themselves confused throughout.