To: Jen
From: Matt

My Yesterday: I like the fact that you are using the passing of time to help describe your feelings. Longing for the past, and certain past events is something i think we can all relate to. You do a good job of convincing me that you're feeling despair over losing someone; however, i would like to know more about who this person is, and why they are no longer around. So i really like the direction of the poem, and i think you do a great job of expressing yourself, i just think you could add more description to help the reader get an even better picture of the situation.

Eyes Closed: This was actually my favorite of the two poems. Where as i think the other one needed to be longer, i think this one is short, yet sweet and to the point. This poem paints a clear mental image for me, and you make it clear to the reader that the poem is from the perspective of another person. I think the last line in particular "Life is easier with your eyes closed" really pulls the reader in. Its a great way to end. I didnt feel like i needed more. I felt like that line alone really held the poem together.