My Yesterday and Eyes Closed

To: Jen
From: Jessica
Re: My Yesterday

When I first looked at your poem I thought of the Beatles song. This poem does not exude much emotion. It tends to stress a specific word but no feeling of why. What kind of emotion are you going through? As the reader, I can’t seem to grasp anything other than sorrow. I would try to put more feeling into this poem. I sense this poem was written at a time when you were at a loss of words. I would just sit and try to let the emotions flow. Sometimes words just come to mind without having to force them. This poem makes me feel a sense of loss and regret.

To: Jen
From: Jessica
Re: Eyes Closed

I believe that this poem was written through the eyes of a man expressing pain. Doesn’t go into much detail about why he prefers his eyes closed or prefers to be kept hidden. Try using more descriptive words to express emotion, to try and tell a story. “Life is easier with his eyes closed”, this line makes the reader think this person is trying to escape from reality. Overall I would say this poem makes me feel as if this person is in denial. I like how the author tried to write from a different angle, not through her own feelings but someone else’s.