A short story

To: Mike
From: Jessica
Re: A short story

Overall this short story was quite creative. It was descriptive with certain details such as “the storm rages like a beast in the sky” and the descriptions of the clothing the boy was wearing. I would say this story is one of sci-fi perhaps reminiscent of a werewolf type story. It begins with a dark tone and ends a bit lighter with the boy having grown up. I like the part where the boy wakes up from what was a dream but really a recollection of that almost fatal moment in time. As for suggestions I would say there are areas that could give a bit more descriptions such as the weapons, what kind/brand and what do they feel like? “The sky raged like a beast”, you could describe the beast. I would also try to use different words rather than always describing the main character as “young man”. There are quite a few misspelled words and run on sentences but nothing to difficult to change. Overall, I would be interested in reading the completed story. What would you title this? Do you have any ideas?