To: Mike
From: Matt

To Protect: I thought the whole concept of the story was great. I enjoyed the switch between dream and reality. It was an effective way to help give background into the story. You gave some good descriptions that helped me visualize the characters surroundings, such as describing the summer breeze, and the grassy fields, and the stary skies. you also did a good job of introducing conflict into the storty early on. From the beggining i could tell the character was in distress over something, and this made me want to keep reading, and find out what... The only problem is i didn't feel like i ever did find out what the deal was with the whole dream sequence. It left me feeling like there should be more. Maybe there are other parts to the story? Also, i would go back through and read the story for yourself, and do some editing. Some of the word usages were off, and at times it confused me. Overall, i think the direction you're going in works, it just needs to be tweaked to give the reader more information into what's going on.