Review for Heather

"The Only Way I Can Say This To You"

You make the theme of the poem obvious from the start. We're clearly talking about relationship issues. You use some good imagery such as "My heart lies in Dixie" "Late nights and sluggish mornings. There were certain words that jumped out at me. I wanted to know more. I think it could be longer and more detail oriented. So many people write poems abut love and romance, and the trick is finding a way to write about it in a way that it hasn't been done before. You have great structure here. I would just like to see some elaboration.

"I Won't Crash...Not This Time"

Of the two poems, i liked this one more. It seemed more genuine to me. I really felt the emotion here. "Jaded by life's experience" "Afraid of excitement" I believed you. Again, i still thought it could be elaborated on a little, but it is clear that you have suffered, and are trying to make a change. Good job.