Review for Marybeth

Hey, It happens:

This was a fun story to read. I think alot of people can relate to the subject matter. Judging someone too soon. Wanting to believe that someone is what you perceive them to be... It's always a let down. You do a great job of flowing words together, and making the story breezy and enjoyable to read. Parts were humorous, and parts left me feeling sorta bad for this "George" kid. You give some great descriptions. Some of my favorites being "Bloated like a water logged corpse" "There's a basic disconnect, like you're on different planes, close enough to wave at each other but not really meet each others eyes." My only issue was that at times i felt like i was reading a letter from a friend rather than a short story. It felt almost too formal maybe? Like something i would read on a blog. I am curious to know if the story holds any truth? I think i would prefer if i didn't. Overall, your writing is definitely something i enjoy, and you have a knack for story telling. Awesome.