Brendon Watts Comments

“I Think the ‘Run Like Hell’ was Implied” Summary:

This story is in first person. The main character gets knocked out and tied up by his co-worker, who steels from the business and runs off with the owner’s wife. The main character escapes his restraints and tracks his co-worker down. After he finds him, the owner of the business comes in and shoots the main character in the face.

“Think the ‘Run Like Hell’ was Implied” Response:

This story is very funny and a bit gross. I love the first paragraph. The thought of Marshmallow Men really gets the reader wondering and it sets the humorous tone of the entire story. You don’t find out until latter that the “Marshmallow Men” are in fact men in bio-hazard suits. Not only does the dialogue flow very well, but a comical tone is clearly present. One of my favorite lines is “Sunday went fast because I had a concussion and I don’t remember it.” I also like the line “Um. I said, and meant it,” which was used through out the story. The character getting shot in the face was written in painful detail. It was almost too disgusting to read. I did notice one possible mistake. When the main character is arguing with the front desk clerk, the clerk gives him the room number, only to be followed by another demand for the room number. I don’t know if this was intentional or not, but if it was an attempt to be funny, it just didn’t work. The story also left me with a few questions I would have liked better explained. Why is the title called, “I Think the ‘Run Like Hell’ was implies,” and what’s the deal with the three mice in the suitcase? Overall, I thought it was very entertaining.