review3: inmate 321324 & complete me

The message in Inmate 321324 is an important one. According to Dostoevski,"The degree of civilization in a society can be judged by entering its prisons". Our prisons are filled with minorities and the poor, our system of "justice" is dehumanizing, and despite obvious racial and economic biases we are one of the only "civilized" societies putting prisoners to death. "Holding you captive behind more than bars and a locked door" is a great line but I think the wording could be streamlined a little bit. I also liked "They hate to see a black man with something to stand for" but I wish you would give us an example- what does he stand for that they're trying to destroy? More specifics in this poem would make it more powerful- tell us about the man who is more than a number (who is he and what was he like before prison? what do you love about him?)and the ways prison is dehumanizing. In Complete me, the repetition of "right now, here" is very nice- gives it the feel of a bed time prayer we might have learned as children. If you are meaning to make this prayer-like, avoiding specifics (like specifically what "they" do that is cold and harsh) is probably best. Otherwise I would suggest more details. I like the format of the beginning lines spaced with "And I'm trying" and "So I keep going". This is also very prayer-like, maybe you could do more with it.