A. Meehan Review

First of all, you made this short story, fun to read. Your use of local slang and talk helped make a connection between the character and the reader, because most of us being from Baltimore, have know someone who talks like this, or at least heard someone who does. I really appreciate the imagery that you have given us, to help paint a better idea of whats going on, for example,
"Funny, the things that go through your head while an elephant sits on your chest,"
Also, "No matter, just dentures, cheap ones that made him look like a jack o’ lantern even when he wasn’t smiling."
And finally, "Joyce didn’t make it so long. Hell, with her bitchy copper penny hair, see through bullshit green eyes and her pissy attitude, you could see why he married her."

You did a very good job describing your characters, and bringing them to life. Although, i wish you would have, given more situations involving these three together. That would have painted a bettter picture of how they interacted with your main character, and their effect/importance in his life, and how they helped make him what he is.