MRussell Review

I really like the imagery you used in "Mary Oliver" For example, the lines, "not the wet, hot harmonica notes rubbing each other rawor the loose sequin leaves of cottonwood trees who shimmy like jazz dancers." I also like how you explained yourself backwards, in that i mean, how you went around the usual everyday description, and described it by telling you readers everything it is not. I think the only way you can improve this poem, is by adding capitilization throughtout the poem.

I think the poem "Poo-tee-weet", hit the nail right on the head, considering the recent social issues involving war, i think the throw back to another poet was wonderful, it really fit in due to the nature of his work. "the bbc host recalls casualties like a grocery list" this line really hits you in the heart because it is so true.


"your pristine beaches and rearing savannahs,
your almond-eyed women, sleek as horses,
your tabla drum language deep with breath,
and spice souks and sandalwood prayers

who will save them?
who will stop talking and save them?"

This is a beautiful use of words, and a wonderful ending to this poem. I love what you have done here, but my only complaint is I want more, a deeper description into every aspect of this poem. I feel that would make it complete and definatly do it for me.