Review for Jessica:

Facade:

I really loved the theme of this poem. Nothing bothers me more than the standards we have set in this society for what is supposedly 'beautiful.' When you say "I want to throw my heels" I can picture it in my head. You've had enough, and it comes through loud and clear. It's evident that you are digging deeper within yourself, and realizing the want for the world to see you as you are, without high heels and make up. The one thing I would like to see is maybe even more angst and detail. Force people to have no choice but to hear what you have to say. Really throw it in their face. Great poem.

Entangled:

One thing I have noticed about your poetry is how to the point you are. I enjoy that you are able to convey your feelings without pages upon pages of filler, but in this case I think you could have explored the situation a little more. I like the whole marionette idea. Trapped and helpless. Only able to function under the commands of another. I Sense a sadness for the situation, yet maybe some subtle relief at the end. It's hard to cut the strings, but you know it must be done, and this gives the poem power. I find myself wanting to know what happens next. After the strings have been cut.