Snow and Ache

In ‘Snow’ I especially liked the difference between the fourth and fifth stanzas, how the fourth related adults acting like kids when it snows and the fifth tackling an adult subject like passion. I think the poem could benefit from this idea, a revolving juxtapose of the childlike images and the adult images. I really like the idea of winter as a poetic subject because it has different effects on different people, and the effect it has on Felicia seems well suited to a poem. I would like to see it be longer and more descriptive however, talk about specifics on both sides of the idea, snowball fights, snow angels, fogged up car windows, kissing, etc. Bring it home for the reader so to speak, put us into that first snow fall when you are acting like a child and that flame rekindled.
I have to applaud the subject matter of ‘Ache’, I know for a fact that it’s difficult to write about, and that’s why my favorite line in the poem may be the most cliche. "This pain I cannot describe". I also like the repetition of ‘My heart still aches from this pain’, it solidifies the idea, but (and I know it’s not easy) describe that odd feeling in your chest, describe the pain and strange hollowness of it and also (maybe if you do this like I do) how you try and detach yourself from the pain. I also like the last stanza a lot as well, and I think with a little added description to the idea of memories (almost like ghosts) that it would sum the poem up very well.