A Farewell and An Irish Saturday Night Drinking Song

A Farewell: I noticed this in your other workshop poems, you really have a way of appealing to the senses. A lot of the images you present to us are easily envisioned. My favorite line was "the grasses of the park waving their hands behind you," personification really adds depth to images and enables the reader to actually see them. I feel that because there are so many illusions to drugs, you could give us a little more. I know you are able to create amazing images so lets see some more!

An Irish Saturday Night Drinking Song: This was brilliant! In fact, it seems that you made everyone smile with this one. This was unqiue, much different from what I had expected. I like that each character has their own little story going on, it really gives this piece some motion and progression. I really liked the line "turning his home into a revolving door," not only did this make me laugh, but I thought it was also a really clever way to describe just how easy Andy's lady was. The chorus is perfectly placed and time, this song clearly has good rhythm and was by far my favorite piece from you yet!