Review: Trenise McClean

Lust: This poem is Raw. Emotional.Passionate. I like the rhythm of the poem, and this line in particular,
"As we tumble through ecstasy in and out
In and out of reality and fantasy I"
There is a struggle between desires: "reality" and "fantasy" and "Love" and "lust."
Sex can be a little messy at the end, and this poem is, too. For me, the last two lines, "Unjust it is But unjust it(?) life," lost the rhythm and seemed anticlimactic after all that passion.

Daddy lists the disappointment and unmet expectations a child with an absent father has to deal with. I like the progression of the time line: Childhood, prom, college, engagement, wedding, grandchild, and how there is resolution and closure at end of the poem, "Unlike me my children will not have to sacrifice."There are alot of typos in this poem, easy enough to fix. The line, "For leaving me alone in the world, you dint care" seems a bit awkward. Maybe "I was alone in the world..." or "You left me alone in the world..."