Review: Daddy and Lust.

I agree when it is said that the topic of Daddy is relaitable and all too familiar with many people now a days. The repition of "Too late" adds a few levels to the poem, at first seeming that the author is stating a sort of "Look what I did without you" tone, but this underlying "I wanted you there" tone struck me after reading the poem a few times over. Great! Near the end of the poem though I feel that you in a way revert back to a childs viewpoint as opposed to this strong independant woman the author is made out to be. "if you did you would be the first and last thing i saw before going to bed" - I'd stick with either the adult view or a child's veiw of an absent father, or balance them out more, I think that'd be extremely interesting.

The poem Lust... WHOA GIRL! ha! While very telling, I believe that the detail you put into the poem should be applauded, that took some guts to put out there. A few things: In relation to line 5, "Love, lust, which I should decide" I think a new title might help seeing as how you are questioning if it is love or lust you are experiencing. But I also think that would be more intriguing to explore. Explain the lust and love side of the encounter, maybe why you can't decide or whats leading to the confusion. The wording of the last two lines is a bit awkward for me, maybe rewording them might help.