Lust and Daddy

In the poem ‘Daddy’ Trenise tackles difficult subject matter, and does a good job of depicting what a dead beat dad misses or more appropriately what he does to try and attempt to be a decent father, and how it dosent pass. I particularly like the line "Why have you done me wrong?" this screams blues music, which I think if you’re going to keep this poem impersonal would be a good way to go. If not, a more personal, introspective approach would help get your anger and anguish across much better.
In ‘Lust’ you describe a very sexual encounter completely unhidden from the reader, which may work in a different context, i.e. had you bared you soul to this person, how ever its his soul that you take, not the other way around. There are a few lines I really like that work very well "As we tumble through ecstasy in and out" and "In and out of reality and fantasy I" these seem to be about the basic physical act of sex but are well hidden in the abstract. Personally I think this poem could work very well in the abstract, not everything has to be a narrative! Imagine very close up photographs of eyes and lips and what ever other body parts you feel like tossing in, describe those with the solid words you already used like tight, wet, dark. Also answer what it’s like to be a slave to lust, you describe all the physical but never the mental. Slave is a very strong word to use, so let the reader know more about it. I think this has a lot of potential, keep working on it.