Felicia Plato Comments

“The Anti-Valentines Day Story” Response:

I enjoyed this story. I got real excited in the first paragraph when I read, “…this time Melisa and Sarah would be doing something different.” I guess I thought the story was going in another direction. I like the way you step back and explain certain things. For example, how Melisa and Sarah compliment each other and how the Hand-Me-Down house got its name. I like that after the Vodka is poured into the water bottles you write, “…and Melisa drank them like they were water.” Lines like that give the story a humorous, yet realistic feel. It had a few spelling mistakes that I noticed: “done,” in paragraph twelve should be down, and “he,” in paragraph thirty should be her. I thought the ending was good, but I think you should include what Sarah said in the message to Kevin.