Jessica Fugate Comments

“Facade” Response:

I like this poem. You do an excellent job of conveying your emotion to the reader. I think my favorite line is, “Allow me to be the person I am afraid of.” That’s a great way to put it because a lot of people are afraid of just being themselves. Another line I liked was “I want to be freed,” that line really sums up the whole poem. It’s as if you’re trapped and you have to be freed before you can truly be yourself. You gave some good examples of what you would be like without your façade; throwing your shoes in a pile of clothes on the floor, wiping off all your makeup. The examples you gave were both physical actions, I would love it if you went into detail about how your personality changes, what kind of things you may think or say differently. There isn’t much I would change, nice work.

“Entangled” Response:

I enjoyed this poem as well. The first line, “Slowly watch it drop, from the ceiling,” gets the readers attention. It made me curious as to what you were describing and what was dropping from the ceiling. Though you never come out and say it, I assumed the poem is about a relationship. On the other hand, it could easily be about a friend or a family member. When I read the line, “Now trapped, in a web you have created,” I would have liked more detail. Maybe talk in less metaphoric terms and describe the events creating this web. I love the ending, how the other person gets caught up in his own web and is forced to cut you both loose. It’s a very creative ending and helps to unify the poem.