Wynter Hall Comments

“Eye of the Dragon” Summary:

This story is about a man named Alexander, who comes face to face with a dragon, Vahira. Vahira gives Alexander her point of view before she is forced to kill her own child. By the end of the story Vahira is about to kill Alexander.

“Eye of the Dragon” Response:

Wynter, I loved this story. It was very compelling; despite its length, I was intrigued with every page I turned. The opening was very fast passed and helped to pull the reader in. I also love how your first several paragraphs are very to-the-point. You keep a comical tone through out your story. This is evident in such lines as “except perhaps the man who had fled,” and, “No, he thought, a mouse has more sense. A mouse would have run by now.” These sentences helped to bring out the personality of the main character. I also love how in paragraph 22 you compare the dragon to a cat and Alexander to a mouse. It was a very good comparison and helped to convey to the reader the helplessness that Alexander felt against the dragon. Another thing I loved was when you included the philosophy of the dragon. It helped to put things in perspective and it gave the story a moral. Overall Wynter, there’s not much I would change, really loved it.