Felicia's story

Seven Midget Strippers

Sean is invited by his friend John to see a show of seven midget strippers. He hits his head in the shower beforehand and afterwards is knifed by a bum.

The Snow White line? Thumbs up. Also to the (self?)-mocking of Dundalk, and to the repetitious nature of Sean’s thoughts during the knifing. On the minus side, the depiction of the seven midgets stripping is a total letdown. It seems like the event the entire story is leading up to, and then is dispensed with in a small paragraph with little enough detail that I could not even imagine the midget strippers. What music was playing? I suppose my point here is that I needed more midget strippers. A few formatting problems – issues with the dialogue punctuation and beginning a new paragraph with each speaker. The story itself left me a little confused. The moral of the story is that the kid gets knifed? Do the seven midget strippers bring bad luck? That could be a good angle.