Seven Midget Strippers

To: Felicia Plato
From: Jessica
Re: Seven Midget Strippers

Brief Description:
This is a story about two guys named John and Sean and their trip to a strip club called Caesars to see 7 midget ones. This was John's idea on how to spend a Friday evening. Once inside the smokey club, Sean did not really get into it until he had 5 beers and a few Jameson shots. Upon exiting the club, two bums tried to rob Sean of his wallet. They manage to fend off the bums with a few punches but end up having to go to the Hospital. They left around 4 am and went their separate ways.

Comments/Suggestions:
This story could use a bit more elaboration in certain areas. Such as describing what the club looked like or mentioning the other 5 strippers. And also the name of the Hospital.The story is entitled 7 midget strippers but that part goes by so quickly. I would elaborate more on the event or change the title to a night out or Friday night trip. I would also suggest adding more details or images. The wording in certain areas needs to be revised. I do like how the reader tried to relate with local people by making comments about Dundalk. The author does try to bring a bit of humor into this story, especially when John remarked, "Wanna do this again next week?"