Charlie's Review of Felicia

“Seven Midget Strippers” Summary:

This story is about two guys, Sean and John, who go to a strip club to watch midgets dance. They ended up getting mugged as they left the club and subsequently had to go to the hospital.

“Seven Midget Strippers” Response:

Felicia, your story was interesting. It had some funny parts in it like the repeated degradation of Dundalkian social status. I also enjoyed the physical humor when Sean was in the shower. It’s usually funny when characters find themselves in odd situations, in this case at a midget strip club. You gave a good description of the strip club, going into detail about aspects of the interior and relating it to things we may recognize (i.e. tables from Ikea). I noticed several small grammatical errors and one misspelling (“there” in paragraph six should be their). It’s also important to note that if there are words following a quotation, it’s generally improper to put a punctuation mark inside the quotation and at the end of the sentence. I was a little disappointed when I got to the ending because your story didn’t seem to have a point to it. I’m not a big fiction reader, so maybe that’s perfectly normal. Overall, I found the story to be funny and entertaining.