Dan Baldwin Comments

“See No Evil” Summary:

“See No Evil” is about a blind boy who wants to see more than anything else. His mother promised him that God would let him see when he turned 16 on April 1^st. It turns out, it was just an April Fools joke.

“See No Evil” Response:

Dan, your story was brilliant. I am extremely impressed with your creativity. In fiction, nothing beats a good surprise ending. The title, by the way, is very fitting. You give great sensory detail in the beginning of the story. I love the part where Billy is describing the cake: “He knew this for now he could feel the heat from the flames warm on his face and a mixture of smoke and chocolate tickled his nose.” This detail gives the reader a great sensory description and makes him feel as if he was actually there. Up until the end of the story, the reader is in a constant state of suspense and anticipation wondering if the boy will actually get his sight back. The reader is really able to connect with the boy and through out the story he is hoping Billy will get his wish. When I read the end I was filled with anger toward the mother; like the title foreshadows, she truly is evil. I loved the story and I wouldn’t change a thing. Any story that can bring out such strong emotions in the reader is truly great.