Marybeth Mareski Comments

“Flight” Summary:

“Flight” is about a plant man and a woman with wings who work on the same floor. Their friendship feeds off one another until the plant man enables the woman with wings to finally take flight.

“Flight” Response:

This is a good story, I enjoyed reading it. A man whose skin is like a plants, and a woman that has wings is a great concept to work with. I like how you leave the reader wondering in the end: Did she fly; if so, where did she go? I love how you use metaphor in the first paragraph: “there was a certain note of disgust that sang between them, like two strings humming together on the same pitch.” It gives the reader a great description of how Frederich and Josephine interact with one another. When you wrote the line, “How do you like Fourteen,” it took me a while to realize you where talking about the floor. I would consider maybe revising that sentence. Another sentence that confused me a little was, “I Have had to take a moment several times, for fear of the vapors.” What does this sentence mean, what are the vapors? Overall, I thought it was a very good story, there’s not much I would change.