Life

To: Israel Loeb
From: Jessica
Re: Life

Another well written poem. I sense a theme of a struggle between a dark painful side and a perseverance to push through the negativity. As if the author is striving for better things in life. A reminder of what was and still could be was the line, "joy as you dance as you lose yourself in the sounds" or "the thrill of new places and new faces the intoxication of love". As for suggestions perhaps change a bit of the wording (weary instead of wary) and (but the tortured of the past instead of tortures) and the tense shifts at times. Overall another good poem.