charlie's story

In A Broken Dream

Kid begins laundering money, begins a lifestyle of debauchery which is stopped short by his impending adulthood.

This story has a good flow, and the details included sort of invoke an 80's yuppie style, sort of American Psycho, a morality tale of 80's debauchery. I don't know that there were enough details to paint any strong images, though. I did like the story, and the tone of the speaker is solid throughout, but where did this kid get this taste for such finery? Giving us a scene of the character looking in catalogues, even, would put down some realism in the narration. Why did Uncle Auggie pick the narrator for this kind of work? Was it his baby face? Because I enjoyed the story, but nothing about it really stuck out for me, and I feel like that sort of narrative detail would help give it character.