Sara Nell Comments

“Night” Summary:

I am not a hundred percent sure as to what I should put as the summary. The poem talked about a starless night, and it talked a lot about a person without any limbs.

“Night” Response:

This poem is very cool. It seemed a little confusing at first, but it’s certainly very artistic. Many people may not like the fact that you rhymed in your stanzas, but I felt that the rhyme only added to your poem. One thing I love is the style of your sentences, for example, lines such as, “Go! Go, so show to me,” and, “I do not wish nor want a hand to play!” Lines like that seem very Shakespearean, which I think work great in this poem. One thing I was curious about is the line, “Quote me not!” What do you mean with this line, can you elaborate on its significance? The poem overall makes the reader wonder as to what you are trying to imply. I don’t think that making the reader wonder can be a bad thing; in fact, I think it works in your favor. Overall Sara, I enjoyed reading your poem.

“Not Afraid of Sharks” Summary:

This poem is about a girl who is afraid of dolphins because most people trust them. She is not, however, afraid of sharks.

“Not Afraid of Sharks” Response:

Your poem made sense to me at first, but when you mentioned “Mohammed,” I got a little confused. The first few lines flow very nicely together. I love how you make it very clear that your fear was of dolphins and that the fear was irreversible. In the next few lines you mention Mohammed, who seems to play a large role in this poem. One line that confused me was, “He was a memory that talked back and made new memories.” What do you mean when you refer to Mohamed as a memory, is he no longer living? Another one of your lines that confused me, “He lost his scales.” Does this mean that Mohammed is some sort of sea-creature? Throughout your entire poem, my favorite line is, “Two hours of words somewhere between a moon and some sunset.” I love how the vagueness of this description gives the reader an emotion of the author’s indifference towards the realization of time.