Israel Comments

“My Quest” Summary:

“My Quest” is about the struggle against all of the horrible things in this world and who you turn to for answers about these things.

“My Quest” Response:

This is a beautiful poem Israel. It’s very inspiring. I love the beginning where it starts with “let me ask you a question.” That line does a good job of drawing the reader in. You have a very good way of giving descriptions to make a statement and to prove your point. My favorite is the line, “The haunting eyes of yet another innocent child corrupted.” The whole poem flows very well together. I also love how you ask the reader so many deep questions. As I was reading the poem, the questions made me want to reflect on myself and maybe try to answer them. I like how in the middle of the poem you wrote, “I do not forsake the idea of god, but perhaps I do at times question his answers,” then in the very last line you go on to write, “for without that dear god I am forever lost.” Those two lines help unify the poem and answer some of the questions you posed in the beginning. It’s a great poem, I loved it.

“Life” Summary:

This poem shows life as a struggle and a fight. The one thing that makes everything better is being able to dance.

“Life” Response:

This is a great poem to. I love the first four lines, “the fight, the struggle, the battle, it hurts.” It’s very fast-paced and intense. I love when you write, “I want to close my eyes, sleep a dreamless night, just the comfort of darkness to enfold me.” I got the impression that this was a metaphor for death. When you think of sleep, you don’t usually think of it as dreamless. I love how you continue with this metaphor and write “Is this nightmare truly worth it?” Not only do you refer to death as dreamless, but you refer to life as a nightmare. I don’t know if this was intended, but I think it’s great. I also like the repetition of the word old on the second page. When you talk about dace, do you mean it literally, or is dance another metaphor for everything in life that makes you happy? My favorite part of the poem is the last seven lines because they sound so aesthetic together.