Review for Jen:

Heartbreaker

I like the images in this poem. "Pulls in the smoke and lets it out" "long dark curly hair" "long embracing kiss" These are good. You speak of this person as if they have broken many hearts before, and i was wondering while reading how you knew this. Perhaps delve a bit deeper into this relationship. The images are strong, and give structure to what can be an intriguing story. Who is this guy with the Marlboro reds and long curly hair?

Loki

The first thing to really jump out at me was the line "our boots smashing the blades of grass" I really like this image, and am jealous i didn't think of it first... I definitely think this is the stronger of the two poems. Again, some strong imagery, and i could relate to the feeling of being young and having such unimportant concerns such as "if i was gonna get carded when i bought my next pack of cigarettes." It brought back memories of my own past.