Egypt Rising

This story was easy to read, and I don't mean that it lacked substance, it flowed freely allowing me to actually enjoy it. Your word choice was very concise, only enhancing the mood of the story. I personally enjoyed that you entered the thoughts of the main character Sandra and enabled the reader to experience them. I also love the fact that you incorporated Egyptian history, and although I do not know much about archaeological excavations, you presented it in such a way that could be clearly understood. My only complaint is that when some of Sandra's thoughts are revealed, they seemed a little cliche at times. But overall, even though the story had an almost supernatural and science fiction-type feel, it was believable. I think you did a great job at portraying your main characters thoughts to your readers, not only clueing them in onto what was going on inside Sandra's head, but also making her more likable and relatable.