Workshop Review I

Poet: Sarah Dillon

In her two poems, Homeward Bound and Philo 101, Sarah shows exuberance and cynicism. Good qualities in a poet. Homeward Bound, great title, Simon and Garfunkel liked it too, had a nice rhythm that became more noticable in the second and third stanzas with the repetition of this couplet and I would suggest that she incorporate it into the first stanza as well:
Right down to the nitty-gritty
This is what we call Charm City
punctuating line 4 in stanza 3 would create emphasis:
Look! in every beat, a cop
Now that is an ironic turn of phrase.
Philo 101 is perfectly titled. In this poem the writer asks philosophical questions about morality even while cursing that which makes her human.
Pet Peeve: ( this is me being a jerk) although it is grammatically acceptable, the usage of the word 'for' in the 7th line in Philo 101 is a bit contrived in the loose, free form context of this poem.
Thank You Sarah!